analyze the story as it unfolds from beginning to end
Please see the attached instructions. My teacher wants revision made on the first essay that is attached on tell tale. Please his comments and also additional revisions he is asking. I’ve also attached pages to the story.
Here are the teachers comments –
You exhibit some very fine statements in this
essay, Sontee, and a strong writing tone.
What I’d like to see you do is review the
INTROS document, first of all, to help you
focus your essay from the outset. Then
analyze the story as it unfolds from beginning
to end, in light of the main idea you DO want
to assert. Prove that/teach that to vour
reader from beginning to end. In this case,
your strongest statements are the ones that
really attempt to understand the psychology
of the narrator (rather than simply labeling
him and using that as an excuse for his
behavior). I suggest you visit the Center for
Writing Excellence to help you conceptualize
your essays as ONE focused lesson for vour
reader, in this case, to understand the
narrator more deeplv.